You've nicely reinforced the stereotype.

Not too bad, at all. I believe the rhyme scheme could be improved to match the original, and the pacing could flow a little better. but as John Barry stated above, you captured the gamer stereotype well

Norman, your effort was there, however "You can don't go outside" is one of several grammatical errors that made following the song somewhat difficult. . .keep writing, because clearly you belong on the site, but keep working on it buddy. . .

Hmm, I dunno... I don't really have a thing of two to say at this song... I might post a parody, guys (GTA-related or otherwise)...

Thanks, John Barry! Yeah, finding the correct words is tough to match the pacing but I did not listen to the original version of this song. I heard another parody of this song by Dr. Dirty with the same title as Billy Joel, describing the most horrible detail of women. Then, I went and got a CD of Billy Joel's stuff and I noticed my pacing was a tad off. Also, "You can don't go outside," is a Singaporean and Malaysian expression by gamers about how they hole themselves in cyber cafes and their rooms. The use Malaysia's and Singapore's dialect of English speaking called Manglish or Singlish has the fusion of Chinese, Malay and Indian words into the common English language. In Mandarin, "Ni bu yong chu chi." means 'You can don't go outside," or more grammatically correct, "You don't have to go outside." As you can see, the English I used here is a DIRECT translation of the Mandarin words and in Singapore and in Malaysia, where 40% of the youth spend their day lollygagging in cyber cafes, playing Internet games that both peers and parents, due to poor education of the English language, often use "You can don't go outside, you sure hidup (survive) laaah."